Thursday, 17 January 2013

Winter Blossoms and Summer Snow

Didnt work, this time its a love poem.


        Winter Blossoms and Summer Snow


Remember that first winter, you cleared the fog
With a swirl of your heady breath;
To catch a glimpse of me running into you, with a smattering 
Of snow on your hair, that day we first met.

You teased, I laughed, like an absurd love song,
We sailed in our congealed cloud of whispered cries.
The heavy winter sky, saturated with sweat;
Rained down on our sparkling panels of ice.

On which we danced and tossed promises of heaven;
In each other's outstretched palms.
The flowers were shriveled, so you crafted blossoms of snow;
For my lonely hair, and I had no qualms.

And the music played vibrant but soothing, a kaleidoscope of symphonies.

It is summer now, and the molten snow has seeped
Into the parched ground on which we stand rooted.
The sieve of vigorous sunshine adorns the hint of a wrinkle on your face.
Again we dance, on our crumbly, brown ice, barefooted.

And scented snowflakes, made of petals, tap delicately on my 
Shoulders, settling on their favorite haunt : your hair.
The pale angry sky softens to grey, steadily raining down
Mingling with the kisses of our perpetual affair.

2 comments:

Rabbi Ritah said...

First off, whoever you wrote this for is one lucky guy. I hope he appreciates what he's got and that he writes you something as warm and vivid as this, if not more. As expected, the poem's full of 'quotable' phrases that delightfully weave together things of different natures - 'winter sky......saturated with sweat', 'brown ice', 'kaleidoscope of symphonies'(now where have I heard that before?), etc. But it's the cause that these phrases serve that really draws me. Here you've presented love in the flowing gown of winter, as something that perseveres despite the bland whiteness of the snow, the biting winds, the impenetrable shield of ice and the overall absence of life, that 'blossoms' even in the sun-less cold. To me, it's like you're saying that love is that human emotion that overcomes, that emotion that is steeped so deep, strong and bright in us that all the snow and ice couldn't dampen it's fiery glow. It is something that even the biting winds of winter can't tear away from us. It is permanent and timeless. So much for winter. The next part is what takes the proverbial cake, for me atleast. Winter melts into summer, literally. Phrases like 'brown ice' and 'molten snow' appear. There isn't any difference between the seasons anymore, nothing to keep the hours within the circles of watches, the hands and lines have all melted away into a languid haze of dream and laughter. Love removes all frames and boundaries of time, there is neither summer nor winter, because what's outside doesn't matter, moreover it isn't even real. What's real is the everything between the two of you, that's something winter cant freeze and summer can't melt. To quote some dumb-ass country singer who wears a cowboy hat - seasons may change, but our love will remain the same. You've put a whole new spin on that, and I like it. A lot. Keep writing.

Anonymous said...

Really, really good. i can't connect with it. But great writing. really good.